Writing



For writing we did an autumn poem/paragraph. Firstly we found a picture on the web. Then we thought about a paragraph/poem to go with it. We then put the photo on to pages and wrote down or paragraph/poem. After that we recorded our story on Garage band and made some music to go with it on garage band. Then we imported the music and recording to I movie and also added our picture to make a slideshow with the noise and yea.

We also did descriptive writing. Ms Stevens gave us a picture and we had to do a descriptive writing around this picture this is mine:

Planning: W.A.L.T: Write descriptively using similes, hyperbolas, and

There are three men who are hunting and then they see this beautiful hawk and want it for its coat. After hunting him for days he finds a sea and starts flying over it because he thought they wouldn't be able to find him. In the photo he is swooping down to get the big juicy fish in the water.

Story: “BANG!!!” “I Think we got em Charlie” Fred said hopping they had got the great big deer. “Oh dang it” Said Nick after searching for the dead deer and not being able to find it. The three men wandered off further into the damp, dark forest trying to find the deer again. After about 15 minutes later Nick started getting annoyed. “Far out” He said looking up at the sky. He went silent for a bit in amazement “Wow look at that beauty” Pointing up at the Beautiful hawk it was as colorful as a rainbow with choclaty brown wings and legs, at the top of the wings was as black as night, his neck was a soft white and the little part before the beak was a yellow patch as yellow as the sun. “Blimey mate”Charlie said amazed, “Golly we gotta get this one mate” They walked closer and closer as quite as a mouse “aaaggghhh” Of flew the hawk as fast as a cheater. “Far out Charlie what happened there”Nick questioned “Mate, I tripped over that stump mate” Charlie said lying on the ground pointing to the stump. “Auzzies”Fred said sarcastically. The three men ran to their old dark blue jeep and drove as fast as a motorbike off towards the ocean hopping it went that way. The three men where right about where the hawk went but they didn't know that. As the three men where driving the hawk was far far of at sea and since the three men didn't have a boat he slowed down for a big juicy fish. “Swoop” down goes the hawk. “Splooosh” He finally gets the fish he’s been waiting for for ages. After his great feast he flies back home to his wife and three kids. Meanwhile the three men Nick, Fred, and Charlie, Couldn't be bothered trying to get that bird and thinking about their plan for next time if this happens. While they where walking down the gravel street with gumboots on, more than three layers of clothing on and their guns chucked over their shoulder. “hold on a minute mate, I haven't had a beer for a while c’mon guys lets stop off at the pubs watcha say bout that mate?” said Charlie “ Hay, thats a pretty good idea for an Auzzie” said Nick pretty glad of his joke. After their fun night at the pub (they got home in one peace luckily) and they had a great (well al right) hunting courier.

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I really enjoyed writing around the pictures. But i didnt really like doing the chain stories because it wasn't planed out.